Story Fictional Attempt at KAG Back Story

Fictional work in process
attempt at what the backstory might be of King Arthur's gold
Don't criticise too heavily. I was in the shower when i thought it up; it sounded a lot better in there too.
gets really corny near the end bad whatever >.<

Story starts off King Arthur learning about his wife, Guinevere running off with Lancelot. Enraged he decides to kill Lancelot and have an affair with one of Guinevere's chambermaids, Fai (Morgan le Fay?). Fai decides to leave after Arthur goes off to hunt Lancelot. While Arthur is off rampaging, Fai has two children, Barborus the Red(barbarias), Valeran the Blue (valour) who grow up to be two very argumentive young men. After learning of Arthur on his deathbed, she gives each her sons a letter that was given to her by Arthur to prove their birthright. After showing the Commander of Arthur's Army the letter, they visit arthur. After many years of war to time Arthur has grown forgetful, he asks Merlin, who just happens to be still alive, to test if they truly are the sons of the king. Merlins tests them and both were proven to indeed be the sons of Arthur or so we think. Merlin actually had already used it as gambling money and all that remained was an illusion and a gold puzzle to nothing, a child's toy. Merlins gave them each a piece of the puzzle saying that the rest of the gold can only be found if the puzzle is completed. Merlins with a very bad gambling adictions, made a risky move, had they been friends, they would have discovered the ploy. It succeed; the two men's stark personalities and vast motives made them argue on everything, they would never of have found out. another risky move Merlin convinced them to trade their gold pieces for magical flags that would pop back into the owners hands when they contacted with the owner. Both were given half of Arthur's army. They start fighting with Merlin supplying them with magical bombs and shops and super building powers. This is when King Arthur's gold begins
D: its horrible bad. I'm one of the people who have to say everything they write is horrible.

 

Kind of reminded me of the TF2 backstory. Good work :P

 

It's not horrible. It could have been a bit more drawn out and better phrased, but it gets the idea across.

 

Lol, Merlin with magical bombs. Nice!

And , what Nighthawk said. It's not horrible. Pretty good for a story born within the mind of someone
who had been in the shower at the time. :p

 

ok first attempt :D i was going to say as they weren't his children as king arthur was infertile after being sacced as a kid D: and just happens that fai might be already had someone else?

 

Can anyone speak in a deep, grizzled voice? Someone could pretend to be either one of the sons and record a video, narrating their every move like Bastion. PLEASE?

 

This entire war, every victory, defeat, death, bombjump, siege, round end turtle, skybridge, entombing builder, zombie outbreak, suicide charge, archer tower, keg detonated, emote taunt, and flag captured was started over a 5 dollar bar bet King Arthur made when he was hammered on strawberry lemonade. Oh, tell him he owes me 5$ the next time you see him.

 

today i learned that Morgan le Fay is Arthur's Step sister, same mother different father. I Am reading The Story of King Arthur and His Knights.
Thinking of changing it to be that guinevere has gone missing and Arthur is sullen, Morgan, gastly as she is decides to woo him.
Also thought to make Barbaros the Red a party guy and Valeran the blue A Library guy? just completely like how they should be.
any takes?