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The Wordsmith's Saloon

Discussion in 'Miscellaneous' started by Joiken, Mar 1, 2016.

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  1. This is a place for all us word enthusiasts and and fellow comrades to share our work and ideas on the creation of imaginary and non so imaginary universes with ink and paper (and maybe other text editing means) :smug:

    In my case, I have some poems and short stories on here. Although some of them are in my mother tongue, most are in English so go give it a look if you feel as so.

    Share your stuff and feel free to give tips and constructive criticism!
     
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  2. king-george

    king-george Haxor Staff Alumni Tester

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    Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall
    Humpty Dumpty got blown by a nuke
    And all of the king's men, and even his duke
    couldn't set Humpty together again

    Yes?
     
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  3. Yagger

    Yagger Kouji's bitch 5eva Staff Alumni Tester
    1. SharSharShar - [SHARK]

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    king arthurs jew gold

    geti wished to have it all

    but i stole it first
     
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  4. an_obamanation

    an_obamanation The boss Donator

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    Donkey dog sat on a log
    Donkey dog ate a green frog
    Donkey dog got really sick
    Donkey dog lost his dick.

    DA EN
     
  5. J-man2003

    J-man2003 Haxor

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    geti = fine bros confirmed?

    I actually have some really crappy poems™

    "Traverse me to a certain period
    Where sliced trees don’t only kill predators
    Where the branches of a head weren’t stopped by ceilings
    And where seekers don’t preferably trust the ghost that may be sheets
    O traverse me to a certain period"

    I will give money to whoever can give me the intended theme, I barely remember it myself.

    this one is cringe so prepare your anuses:

    "Bad-guys win
    Good-guys lose
    When prisoners shouldn’t have to be bailed
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?

    Construction has failed
    Not that the building seemed to matter
    My house though will never be sold
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?

    Trees block light
    Connection’s Low
    Maybe I can still travel back
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?
    Oh why is this fabric so frayed?"

    ye I like poetry it's pretty dank m9, gotta love emily dickinson's works.
     
  6. Pretty good concept on the first one. It seem's like it's about self-growth and how that is repressed nowadays?
    The second one I find it really cheesy? Maybe that's not the point or it is but it sounds like a song. It has a lot of rhythm!
     
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  7. I currently have about 10,000 different ideas going on, far too many of them are post-apocalyptic princess stories.
     
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  8. MadRaccoon

    MadRaccoon Haxor

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    Gravity

    I trew a grenade in the air
    Fell the grenade did
    Enemy tought it was theirs
    The 'nade blew up and made a hole in the ground.

    The Gardener got upset.
     
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  9. an_obamanation

    an_obamanation The boss Donator

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    Gaze into the valley where I grow fucks.
    As you can see, to give I have many.
    What you can also see is that you're not getting any.
    Because I want to be the reason your life sucks.

    >=l #Evilpoetry #Makeallthepeoplesuffer #Pancake #Blisteringtitanium #The_Clev
    --- Double Post Merged, Mar 2, 2016, Original Post Date: Mar 2, 2016 ---
    Humpty Dumpty got blown by a nuke!? KEEP IT PG MAN!
     
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  10. Either have swearing or no sense in your poems. Never both.
     
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  11. an_obamanation

    an_obamanation The boss Donator

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    But I had Swearing, No sense, and Immaturity in that one, so therefore it's okay right?

    Psst, i'm sorry.
     
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  12. Your logic is very peccable.
     
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  13. J-man2003

    J-man2003 Haxor

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    Look who's talking

    My poems feature really stupidly hard to interpret metaphors, which is how I want it. I like making people feel stupid :^_). Most of my poems also tie to a serious social issue, because I'm boring.

    I just remembered I had a prototype stuffed somewhere, here it is:

    "To escape the chains of serpents,
    Is to fight Jupiter's moons
    And though the crater's details are persistent,
    It is worth a slice from the saint's blade"
     
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